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Malaak V20 by Majnouna Malaak V20 by Majnouna
Apologies for this delay due to life demands that were frankly impossible to ignore. All the more frustrating to me because this is such a key moment of the story in my eyes. I can say that I have just been given an imperious reason to complete the comic as soon as possible, so I have a lot of incentive not to let such delays happen again. The next page is being colored and shaded and so should be on schedule. Critiques welcome as usual!

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:iconwyogirl22:
WYOgirl22 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
They look like evil cinnamon rolls.:o Can't wait to see how the rest of this story turns out, it's awesome!
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neilak20 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
*on edge of her seat* :o
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Majnouna Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Professional General Artist
Me toooooo!
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GreenSprite Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Ooh, it's getting hot in here.

I see just one problem here: in the penultimate panel, one can logically tell that the larger speech bubble belongs to Amer, but visually it looks like it's Malaak's. Maybe you could move its tail to the bottom and lengthen it?

Also, it took me a bit to realise what was happening in the middle panels. I just interpreted it as one static thing at first. In retrospect, I actually like your solution to showing it, so I'm not sure if it's a bug or a feature :lol:
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Majnouna Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012  Professional General Artist
Yes, that bubble tail bugs me a lot! It will need revising.
I can push the contrast between the inside and outside of the frames, if that's helpful? :) It is one static thing, but the frames are meant to isolate certain things so they're more clear. If that's not working though, it can be altered!
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GreenSprite Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Oh hm, now I wonder if I misread it. Aren't the bodies somehow forming out of the lava? If so, it's not *exactly* static :) Anyway, I think upping the contrast should work, if only because it would force the eye to consider each panel individually rather than skim over the whole thing at once.
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Majnouna Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012  Professional General Artist
They are, but we're not looking at one spot of the "lava" where a body is forming, but at different spots of the panorama where there are bodies in various stages of composition.
That answers my question, thanks :)
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